akel and wake - both sick stuff, no crits

just colored this

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tare: work on your R's a bit more, try diff stuff with the top loop of the R.
ill pm you with sketches of R's of what i mean later on today.
other then that your improving alot

 

i havnt been writing long, appreciate what people have to say.

 

headsick- simples

I need help finishing this

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bump 4 sum crits
i know the boxes r fuct n i dun like my r
cyto - make ur a taller, make ur t n first stick on r skinnyer n make the e consistant in thickness n maybe lose the curl at the bottom

cash - same 4 u make the thickness of ur letters consistant

desypher - maybe lose ur extensions on the 3d

 

rave thats a lot better than your other stuff, at least i can read it. an to be honest, i like the boxes, i think its a fresh idea. i just dont think it looks good with the steeze of your letters. keep the idea for when you progress more. thicken up your bars and bring your letters closer together

tare, make your A bigger, i dont like how its smaller than the rest. its lookin good bro

i know its wack, but i think it could have potential if worked with. any crits before i had the shadow to it??

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lol i think the top box came out nice but the bottom one is gay

jet take out the top 2 extensions on ur t n maybe the 2 at the bottom right of ur m lookin letter
n what does it say tamk or tamc or w/e??

 

shouldn't you be better by now?

 

obvi i can do better shit i just felt like doin sumthin really simple
im not tryin 2 impress ne1

 

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shit doesn't make sense, not hatin' it just doesn't make sense.

 

just messing around with colors, really. kinda fucked up the Y. Rave, just work on letters before you add anything like the boxes.

 

ickis work on your letters before wasting color and straighten your hand up.

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how doesnt it make sense vowels i dun get it??

 

Please god don't use letters from Mr. Wiggles then tell somebody else to work on their letters.

 

jet pack i would stop connecting the letters 2gether... it makes it hard to read

seek139 id drop the random huge extensions around the letters

critics plz

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Not digging the "T" in the first one, the second piece is tight.

 

yeah im working on the last two now, havin a bit of trouble with it, but its gettin there. any suggestions on what would look good with the M and the K at the end?

erase, im diggin your steeze, that one were the letters head downwards is ill. your steeze has kinna an azn feel to it. nice color choices as well. the only thing im not entirely feelin your R. maybe try spacing out the kick and the loop of it just a bit

cheers