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Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Kayone707, Jun 15, 2005.

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  1. enigmatic

    enigmatic Senior Member

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    FASH you need to seriously just bench and look at graff for a few hours...

    theres so many things wrong with that, but dont be discouraged. im here to help. lets begin. Firstly, Y. Look at that. You can either make it like that, or even better, y. Like that. Sometimes they have curves. Lets just forget about that for now.

    Secondly. The upper right hand corner makes NO sense. Theres like 6 bits were the bar should be. I mean, why? Bits and addons make sense only when yout letters make sense. But those are just structuraly unsound all the way through.


    The bar thickness is inconsistant.

    Why is there a hole in your left bar? Jeez.

    That arrow. Wow, just get rid of it.

    The only bit that makes sense is the one on the bottom left. Otherwise just start over.

    Also the circles dont make sense. There just sitting there.
     
  2. enigmatic

    enigmatic Senior Member

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    Those are sooo much better than that Y...

    But your overthinking this.

    Simple Letters+Well Placed Extensions+Good Colors+Flow=Style.

    Look at South Pole's Signature.

    See the "SUSPE" and "WEAN" on the top of that truck.

    Do thousands of those. Those are so hot. Perfect burners. And they have 0 arrows or extensions and shit.
     
  3. renz198

    renz198 Member

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  4. Vagrant

    Vagrant Elite Member

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    Fash: Although Enigmatic ripped your shit to shreds, I think he was only critting your Y, which IS pretty wack.
    HOWEVER, your above post of your letter progression is right on. Keep going with the bar constructed letter progression. It is helping you a lot.
    After getting your letter progressed to where they end on that page, you can try tweaking the thicknesses a little bit, make some lines not parallel, round off some ends in various ways... distort them a little bit, y'know?

    And please... get rid of that picture in your signature.
     
  5. LiFoH<~~~

    LiFoH<~~~ Member

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  6. StAtiK1

    StAtiK1 Senior Member

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    pretty nice lifer, the L could use work though and maybe put a hole or something in the R where its supposed to be cause it looks a bit like an n
     
  7. silentchaos14

    silentchaos14 Elite Member

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  8. Olick

    Olick Elite Member

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    you forgot the shadow on the bottum of the A.

    start off with simples. go to google and type block letters. and bite the fuck out of them. once you mastered that shit then you can start pimpin out the letters and makin ur own style
     
  9. Roolete

    Roolete Elite Member

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    olick i disagree. hes done enough simples. silent dont cut your L like that. start getting creative. i know you dont completely have structure down but that this rate unless you try something different your not goin anywhere
     
  10. "Fasho" T|y|B

    "Fasho" T|y|B Senior Member

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    thanks enig and vagrant ill just trash that y haha

    and i changed the sig for ya
    and its smaller so it wont take up the whole page if you dont like it :X
     
  11. Bizzaro

    Bizzaro Senior Member

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    yo fasho that y you drew looks like it was heavily influenced by the letters in the new to graffiti forum especialy with the tail goin through the main part of the y,,, just my opinion
     
  12. Haz-E

    Haz-E Senior Member

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  13. LiFoH<~~~

    LiFoH<~~~ Member

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    avore Banned

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  15. Bizzaro

    Bizzaro Senior Member

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    i think you need to get back to simple round block letters before you try dis-proportioning your letters and get ride of those ugly points at the end of all your letters round the points out and leave spaces between the legs of the R dont overlap them and do the same with the n and the e leave space between the bars. The hole in the o is to big. Pretty much scrap the whole thing :( and your drop shadow is good but you have to continue lowering the bottom because its lower at the top so it should come down past the letter
     
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  16. Bizzaro

    Bizzaro Senior Member

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    Heres another simple and on top of it is a throwie im gona use... i know its not words but i think its dope
    ai227.photobucket.com_albums_dd49_Bizzaro_album_6.jpg
    srry about the size
     
  17. sketch3

    sketch3 Banned

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    leettas=nice
    face=not so good
     
  18. Bizzaro

    Bizzaro Senior Member

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    i think its unique pluss its a one liner pretty much except for the eyebrow and the speech blurb
     
  19. NAIK_SHOES

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  20. sketch3

    sketch3 Banned

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    its far from uniqe,
    and the fact that its a oneliner dosnt stop it being under developed,
    could have a nice thing going but its un realised. need to werl on it